My eldest son sees dragons everywhere; after each successive swing on his garden swing, I begin to see them, too, as he points them out to me.
The image is from Portsmouth, a naval city in England with a fascinating tower near the main military port. If there are dragons in the clouds near Portsmouth, they are keeping themselves at a safe distance.
I also rather like the change in meter, breaking the first line into two, which reminds me of the action of pushing... the swing and then doing... something else with this... manner of rhythm.
I have to admit this poem caught my attention more than most.. Keep at it! I think the break in rhythm also adds a pause and a back step where the mind has a chance to breathe and flood with mental imagary and emotion. Isn't life all about? Its a good one.
My eldest son sees dragons everywhere; after each successive swing on his garden swing, I begin to see them, too, as he points them out to me.
ReplyDeleteThe image is from Portsmouth, a naval city in England with a fascinating tower near the main military port. If there are dragons in the clouds near Portsmouth, they are keeping themselves at a safe distance.
Toodlepip,
Hobbes
I also rather like the change in meter, breaking the first line into two, which reminds me of the action of pushing... the swing and then doing... something else with this... manner of rhythm.
ReplyDeleteI have to admit this poem caught my attention more than most.. Keep at it! I think the break in rhythm also adds a pause and a back step where the mind has a chance to breathe and flood with mental imagary and emotion. Isn't life all about? Its a good one.
ReplyDeleteWithout the explanation I thought you had a bit too much pesticide laced pu erh :P
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